Alastor Guado, Sin's Wrath

[Alastor Guado]

Alastor Guado

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Race[/size][/b]
Guado

Gender[/size][/b]
Male

Age[/size][/b]
22

Sexuality[/size][/b]
Heterosexual

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Faction[/size][/b]
Yevon

Alignment[/size][/b]
Evil

Class[/size][/b]
Dragoon

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Personality[/size][/b]
- Courageous
- Loyal
- Confident
- Intelligent
- Calm and collected

- Over-zealous
- Inhumane
- Vengeful
- Obsessive
- Racist

Appearance[/size][/b]
Click here for photo!

Height: 6’2”
Weight: 200 lbs
Build: Muscular, but not bulky; defined
Skin Colour: Dark gray
Hair Style: Long (down to his waist) with 4 horn-like spikes that naturally form from the top of his head
Hair Colour: Light gray
Eye Colour: Light gray
Clothing: His armor is a black layered metal. On his shoulders are orange fins. A long black cape with designs on it is worn off his back. Not much more to say here. Look at the picture. kthx

Weapons[/size][/b]
Longinus : [MAGICAL] As seen in the appearance photo, Longinus is a spear with a mean head and a black shaft, and is roughly six feet long. The opposite end of Longinus is a rounded metal tip for blunt damage. Despite the appearance of this weapon, its real lethal power comes from the magical abilities attributed to it:

- Sin’s Grasp : Longinus can extend at high speeds at any target with a fifty foot limit. Longinus doesn’t have to extend linearly either; it may bend to meet its target.
- Sin’s Transparency : Longinus can attain a transparent look to it, allowing it to travel through non-living objects. This ability cannot be used to go through PC weaponry/armor.
- Sin’s Weight : Anything that makes contact with Longinus will have Gravity cast upon them twice. This is what is called the ‘initial contact’. After the initial contact, any additional contact casts a single Gravity spell. This ability can stack up to five Gravity spell casts (4 contacts total). Despite any stacking done, the effects of this last two rounds.

Chains : An orange/red chain whip with spear points on each end (as designated in the picture). At this time, they have no magical powers, but can effectively be used for physical attacks if for whatever reason Longinus isn’t working.

Armour[/size][/b]
Resurrection : [MAGICAL] As seen in the appearance photo, Cross is an elaborate set of black armor with orange tinges here and there and a long cape extending behind him. Much like Longinus, it serves the purpose it was designed for (providing high defense against physical damage), but also has some magical powers to it that make it amazing:

- Sin’s Deception : Resurrection’s cape can become extremely solid, allowing it to be used as a shield.


Items[/size][/b]
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Class Abilities[/size][/b]
Lancet: The user absorbs a small bit of the target’s energy, weakening the target and healing themselves by a tiny amount. Some people say that this ability has a hidden power, but not many people know it. [Cooldown: 1 post] AP Cost: 30 AP

Silence Attack: Strikes at the opponent and usually inflicts Silence on them. [Cooldown: 2 posts] AP Cost: 40 AP

Quake: Cause a roughly 50-foot-diameter area around the target to shake and rupture, unbalancing and damaging enemies. [Cooldown: 2 posts] AP Cost: 45 AP

Gravity: Causes a foe’s weight to increase, slowing them and taking away the power of flight for 2 posts. [Cooldown: 1 post] AP Cost: 35 AP

Custom Abilities[/size][/b]
Crown of Thorns : The veins of the Guado race are very predominant in their face. In Alastor, the veins are a glowing glyph, which gives him this particular ability:

- Sin’s Terror : With every Lancet use, a horrible memory of the target’s is projected into the area as an illusion. Only Alastor and the target can see this illusion. Alastor can manipulate this illusion to make the target’s memory even more horrible. This ability can physically harm the opponent in no way. OOCly, the target chooses which memory is to be used, and then I work with it from there.



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History[/size][/b]
For years, Alastor worked as a Yevon Priest. With dreams of being a Maester for the Guado, Alastor was highly diligent in his studies and his workings, doing everything he could to achieve the dream.

Grand Maester Seymour was his hero. Not only did he represent the Guados, but he had given his race the power again to be respected. It was amazing! All because of that man. When Alastor was to become Maester, he would surely have to meet this Seymour!

Declaration of Seymour’s death came as a shock to the entire world, especially the Guado, especially to Alastor. Oh, how he despised that group of brats who had destroyed all that was good in the world.

Sin was gone too. Oh, what a bad sign this was. How would mankind be punished now? How would they repent for their wrong-doings? There was no repentance. And for the two years without Sin and Seymour, Alastor watched the Spira spiral out of control.

Over those two years, Alastor watched and watched and watched, and his hate grew and grew and grew.

The High Priest himself had caught Alastor’s eye. The High Priest of the time had changed like everyone else. He had changed so much so that the teachings of Yevon that he was preaching were manipulated to serve his desires. When rumors of the High Priest’s monetary greed caught Alastor’s ears, that was all it took. Alastor murdered the High Priest before long, and was banned from the Temple of Yevon forever.

And that day was the day that Alastor cursed the world. He would bring back Sin at all costs. All in the name of Yevon. All in the name of bringing back repentance and humility and fear.
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Face Claim[/size][/b]

For some original/unknown piece of artwork:
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Creator’s Name[/size][/b]
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Other Characters[/size][/b]
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[Moderator]

I'd like to see a few tweaks to some of the abilities. First one that really caught my eye was Sin's Sacrifice. Tripling the damage that he suffers as a damage rebound is rather powerful, considering it's a passive ability. I'd be happy with this as an activated ability with a post cool-down, say, is active for 1 post, with a 3 post cool-down once the duration finishes?

Second was Sin's Weight. This effectively is a touch based Gravity, so to be able to use this ability with every strike made, effects being cumulative means that at the end of a post, another characters blocking strikes are going to carry the weight of effectively a city. I would suggest the ability being a touch based Gravity spell, which may stack with a subsequent cast of Gravity, should you acquire the ability.

Third is Sin's reach. I would suggest putting a limit on the distance this can reach, and not allowing it to be flexible, since an infinite reach on a weapon means that most ranged classes will be powerless to so much as touch you, since their only advantage over you is taken away, and a blade that seeks its foe means it is essentially unblockable.

Finally is Sin's Deception. Again, problems with continuity, if this ability has no cool-downs, and no restrictions, it's going to lead to a situation where it simply becomes impossible to kill you. There are two routes which I would suggest, the first being to make this an ability that doesn't actually improve the defence, only giving the illusion of it being there (hence deception), the second to allow only the cloak to morph, and only allow it to take the form of shields of common materials.

Thanks.

[Administrator]

I feel I have a slight discordance with Cloud, though not a major one.

For starters, I will agree that triple the pain is a bit too much, simply make it double. (I'd also like to point out as a future reference to the people who read this CS; he doesn't feel the damage, but its still there. If you chop off his arm, he won't feel a thing, but he's still going to lose said arm lol)

As for the "Passive Ability" thing...I agree, yet disagree. While it is passive, the fact that it only works if some form of physical contact with Alastor is made makes it a REALLY hard technique to "abuse", since constant contact is pretty hard to maintain in battles, especially RP PvP Battles, and that constant contact has to be maintained before, during, and after Alastor is harmed in order for his foe to feel it. So, I say that the ability should be able to cause the person who Alastor is touching to feel attacks and not need it to be "activated" before the contact, but can only be maintained for 2 Posts straight.

Oh, and take away the "Even if the attack isn't successful" part, as that's a bit unfair.

With Sin's Weight, I think that a balance should be made, as there are a LOT of light-weighted things that aren't going to be effected by weight doubling without numerous hits (Mythril, for instance). I think that the weight should merely be doubled, and that the effect should only be able to be stacked a maximum of five times. Plus, another thing to this factor is the simple truth that if a person's item/weapon/wahtever weighs too much, they can discard it.

I will agree with Sin's Reach, though the flexibility sounds fine. I'd say about 50 feet or so should be alright.

I also agree with Sin's Deception, especially since a few materials are restricted use for Leaders/Lieutenants Only. One suggestion I'd like to make is possibly restricting what it can change into by what materials Alastor himself has on him and is in contact with the cape itself.

Sin's Transparency, btw, is technically able to go through armor, and thus needs edited as well. Maybe just say that "Inanimate materials that have a strong life-force presence touching them cannot be pierced through either", thus making armor unable to be pierced, but allowing you to still go through walls/rubble/etc.

Lastly, don't forget about the Yevon Bonus I OMed you about, an extra 50AP is always nice and should be able to get you an extra Class Ability.

[Alastor Guado]

All magics edited. Sin's Sacrifice has been removed. Sin's Terror added.

[Moderator]

I'm cool with this, I think it's a fair compromise with Az and myself, I have no qualms accepting this now.

1/3

[Administrator]

Just remember that you've got 50 AP left to play with~ lol After a little difficulty, this is....

[ACCEPTED]

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