Yuffie II The Clever Thief

[Yuffie Kisaragi]

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Yuffie Kisagari

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Race[/size][/b]
Human

Gender[/size][/b]
Female

Age[/size][/b]
16

Sexuality[/size][/b]
Heterosexual

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Faction[/size][/b]
Virtue

Alignment[/size][/b]
Neutral

Class[/size][/b]
Thief

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Personality[/size][/b]
Yuffie was very dismayed when her foster parents met the same fate as her birth parents, they were killed by a rogue band of pirates that called themselves "El Pollo Loco". They were all buried at the Luca Cemetery on the outskirts of town. After her foster parents were killed, her memories started to come back. Sometimes in small flashes and other times, many complete scenes.
+Noble Cause
+Stalwart Fighter
+Quiet
-Secretive
-Sneaky.
-Untrustworthy
-Ruthless
-Unfeeling
-Bad Method For Achieving Cause

Appearance[/size][/b]
Height: 5'2"
Weight: 105
Hair Style: Short, Straight
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Brown
Her weapon of choice is a large fuma shuriken Yuffie wears a white headband with a green, sleeveless turtleneck jumper that bares her stomach and unbuttoned tan shorts. Over her left arm she wears a protective gauntlet that originates from a single pauldron over her shoulder, presumably meant to also act as a shield. The gauntlet is held in place via a strap tied across her chest and around her back. Typical ninja-mail mesh covers part of her right arm and left leg as well as an additive piece of armor covers the rest of the thigh of that leg. She wears a smaller wrist-covering gauntlet on her right arm, both hands are covered with fingerless gloves while she wears brown sneakers with white leg warmers.

Weapons[/size][/b]
Knives, Boomerangs, Origami throwing daggers, Shuriken

Armour[/size][/b]
Not much.

Items[/size][/b]
Shuriken.

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Class Abilities[/size][/b]
Ninjas are characterized by wearing cowls that cover their mouths and head, and lightweight armor. Their weapons include special daggers and boomerangs. Physically they are strong and have high Speed, but their HP and Defense is low. Their special ability is called Throw, which lets them throw weapons including Shuriken and magical Scrolls to do high damage, but in most cases, the item thrown is lost.. In some installments, they are able to wield specialized Ninjutsu magic. They usually also have methods of nullifying physical attacks by creating illusions, and are able to equip two weapons at once. In a handful of games, Ninjas are an upgrade of the Thief class.

Custom Abilities[/size][/b]
None. (as of yet)

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History[/size][/b]
Yuffie is a young, carefree girl, but she has quite a temper. Yuffie lost her memories of the past
and is trying to get them back. When she was 8, she was rescued from the slums by Al-Bhed soldiers and was taken to Luca, there she was adopted by an older couple that couldn't have children with the last name Kisaragi. They taught her everything she knows and gave her love. They loved as if she was their own. A few days after Yuffie turned 16, Luca was attacked and her foster parents were killed. The city was evacuated and everyone was told to take shelter in Bevelle. When everyone went back, Yuffie buried her parents and vowed to avenge them. When she thought that she had mourned their loss enough, she went back to Bevelle. There she became an accomplished thief until her Al-Bhed friends called on her for aid. She still works with the Al-Bhed every now and again when they really need it.She thought that everyone didn't care about her, and so she cut herself off from others and kept to herself. She didn't start to open up until she met a blond boy she never met. She even made friends with all of the people in her group and started to tell them what she remembered of her past. Everyday they'd pester her until she'd help them and when they saw her smile, they all wished it wouldn't fade. As you know, all things must come to an end. Yuffiehad to leave on a mission for her Al-Bhed friends and her friends in Bevelle didn't know. When she got back, they just about killed her for not telling them how long she'd be gone, or where she went. She always had it really rough though, but her friends will never be allowed to find out.
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Face Claim[/size][/b]
Yuffie Kisagari + FF VII & VIII, KH I & 2
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Creator’s Name[/size][/b]
CrimsonLaurana

Other Characters[/size][/b]
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[Moderator]

A few changes to be made...

The history and appearance needs all references to Final Fantasy VII and such removing, just have it that 'Yuffie is (Insert description here)' and 'Yuffie (Insert history here)'. Since the events on Spira are seperate from the rest of the FF series, as well as it being an FFX RP, we need everything to be isolated in the FFX universe.

The notion that the Ninja is an upgrade to the Thief class denotes that it should really be a Thief, with Ninjutsu related abilities, or, if you wish Yuffie to be unique, having her isolated from the Thief class.

The Limit Breaks and such need explaining more. Will these work differently in practise, or are they the same as a regular ability? If they are different, you need to explain how, if not, just remove the Limit Break text please.

The others are simply to space out the abilities, so each one is more clearly marked as a seperate ability, and could you find a smaller icon for the top of the CS please? You can use the one existing as part of your appearance section, but we'd prefer it if you had small icons at the top, like avatar selection, or something of that ilk.

Cloud

[Yuffie Kisaragi]

I would like her to be unique, if that's alright with you. I edited it a bit and I would like you to check it as soon as you feel like it. I don't want to feel like I forced anyone to do anything.

[Moderator]

The uniqueness is fine, but I'd prefer it if all references to 'Game play' are removed. So, for example, instead of, 'In some installments', replace it with 'Some see this as'. Furthermore, I need any reference to anything from FFVII being removed, that isn't strictly Yuffie herself or Yuffie's family, namely, Shinra Inc. and Materia. You could replace, for example, references to Shinra with Yevon, and Materia to Machina. Or something along those lines.

A little more development on the history would also be nice, just a little fleshing out, like why the events had an effect on her. Link it to your personality. Furthermore, 'the group', while this refers to the FFVII party you play, we need a reference to something from FFX, so, in her instance, it could be a travelling group of adventurers. Link these things in to make her seem more like a person than an entry on a data file.

[Yuffie Kisaragi]

I just got back from school a little while ago and I am not in my right mind. Tell me if ?I missed anythin', 'kay? I might not be on for a while. 1st Semester Finals are this week. T_T

[Moderator]

Also, I would like to point out a coding error. There are supposed to be three 100 x 100 icons centered at the top above the name.

Another point, the class is an issue. Ninja, while in FFVII is a class, it's not here. There is an option to do a custom class though but that means doing the work and explaining the limit breaks thoroughly and in them stop referring to thieves. With the constant reference to thieves it would be easier to make her a thief.

The history needs to be fixed though. There are still references to FFVII, strong references at that. Please somehow create her history, without the FFVII references, to reflect that of the events that occurred in FFX. This essentially means coming up with a new history for her.

And one more thing. The Face Claim is supposed to be in a code box which is something like this and is very clear in the CS template. And you do that by using these: [*code][*/code] but take out the "*".

Please pm the moderators when the edits have been made.

-Rikku

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